四、六級考試越來越使模板無用武之地,閱卷老師在閱卷的過程中最多的是關(guān)注同學(xué)們的用詞和句型的使用。
高分作文標(biāo)志
1:四級120-150字;六級150—180字;
2、是否長短句交叉;
3、用詞是否恰當(dāng),準(zhǔn)確,形象,盡量使用能夠吸引閱卷老師眼球的閃光詞;
4、關(guān)鍵詞是否換用,切勿老用重復(fù)詞;
下面給出寫好一篇作文的注意事項:
1. 適當(dāng)用被動代替主動,這樣能更客觀的反映事實,句子開頭不要總是用we / I (比如寫結(jié)尾時不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. )舉個經(jīng)典結(jié)尾2004年六月六級作文的最后一段:It is, therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus,its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
2. 善于使用插入語,比如說把副詞、連接詞等,作插入語放在中間,一般放在主語、動詞或者助動詞后,兩邊分別加上逗號。
如however / therefore /for example/I believe做插入語放在中間,一般放在動詞,助動詞后,兩邊分別加上逗號。
比如說:Other individuals, however, take the attitude that…
3.一定要學(xué)會換詞,換形象,具體的代替太寬泛的。(考試中一般不要出現(xiàn)good, bad , many, thing, think, people, opinion等等)比如上面例子中,applicable代替proper; approaches代替ways; implement代替carry out; sharpen one's competitive edge代替enhance one's competitiveness(提高某物競爭力)
下面舉一篇我班上一位同學(xué)寫的優(yōu)秀作文(14分)的例子,看看他是如何運用各類寫作技巧的。這位同學(xué)把老師上課講的各類寫作手法和精彩替換和句型都用上了,作文有了很大的提高。
標(biāo)題:Computer and I
第一段:I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that I indulged myself in googling an army of useful information I had expected, and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly替換very
thrilling替換exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb替換sb. be interested in sth.
google替換search
an army of替換a lot of
第二段:The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say that we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
The dawn of the new century witnessed是一個精彩句型,用來描述在某個時期發(fā)生了什么事情;
Increasing popularity替換more and more popular
Coincident with…非常地道的詞匯,表達"與…一致"的意思,替換With…
Advancement替換development
Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替換enter into
Current ( currently )替換now
Appeal to sb.替換sb. be interested in sth.
Growing individuals替換more and more people
It is no exaggeration to say經(jīng)典句型,說某事是毫不夸張的
第三段:To begin with, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment. Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
We can, freely, search用了插入語的寫作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened.用了非常精彩的被動
Additionally替換In addition / Besides
Deliver替換send
第四段:There is no denying that, however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen, which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings,這個句子有三個精彩之處,首先There is no denying that這個句型,還有however作為插入語,function in the disservice of替換do harm to
Emerging代替appearing ( fading代替disappearing )
Net citizen網(wǎng)民,屬于精彩用詞
第五段:As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should, therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.
No garden has no weeds替換Every coin has two sides
Computers do play,do強調(diào)
Positive替換important / good等
A slice of替換a part of
Unfavorable替換bad
Impacts替換effects / influences
We should, therefore, take advantage of…使用插入語
Fruits (而且fruits用的非常形象,merits/ virtues)替換advantage ( defects替換disadvantage )
Facet替換aspect
各位同學(xué),上面的作文里有這么多精彩的閃光點,作文怎么會不得高分呢!
以下是30個最經(jīng)典的替換詞,各位同學(xué)可以參考一下。
1.individuals,characters, folks代替(people ,persons)
2: positive, favorable, rosy(美好的),promising
(有希望的),perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding代替good
3:dreadful, unfavorable, poor, adverse(有害的)代替bad
如果bad做表語,可以有be less impressive代替
eg. An army of college students indulge themselves in playing games, enjoying romance with
girls/boys or killing time passively in their dorms. When it approaches to graduation ,as a result, they find their academic records are less impressive.
4.(an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of ,many, if not most)代替many.
注:用many, if not most一定要小心,many后一定要有詞。
eg. Many individuals, if not most, harbor the idea that….同理用most, if not all ,代替most.
5: a slice of, quiet a few , several代替some
6:harbor the idea that, take the attitude that,
hold the view that, it is widely shared that,
it is universally acknowledged that)替think
(因為是書面語,所以要加that)
7:affair ,business ,matter代替thing
8: shared代common
9.reap huge fruits代替get much benefit )
10:for my part ,from my own perspective代替in my opinion
11:Increasing(ly),growing代替more and more(注意沒有g(shù)rowingly這種形式。所以當(dāng)修飾名詞時用
increasing/growing.修飾形容詞,副詞用increasingly.
eg. sth has gained growing popularity.
Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth.
12.little if anything,或little or nothing代替hardly
13..benefitial rewarding代替helpful be beneficial of
14.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser,代替customer
15.exceedingly,extremely代替very
16.hardly unnecessary, hardly inevitable ...代替necessary,
inevitable
17.sth appeals to sb, sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb代替sb take interest in
18.capture one's attention代替attract one's attention.
19.facet,demension,sphere代aspect
20.be indicative of ,be suggestive of ,be fearful of代indicate, suggest ,fear
21.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger代替cause.
22. There are several reasons behind sth代替..reasons for sth
23.desire代替want.
24.pour attention into代替pay attention to
25.bear in mind that代替remember
26. enjoy, possess代替have(注意process是過程的意思)
27. Interaction代替communication
28.frown on sth代替be against , disagree with sth
29.to name only a few, as an example代替for example
30. next to/virtually impossible, 代替nearly impossible