2010年6月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四六級(jí)考試寫作全面解讀(8)

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　　該預(yù)測(cè)題為社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)話題，四級(jí)考試命題作文�？碱}材。本文屬于圖表作文的寫作。根據(jù)四級(jí)圖表作文命題規(guī)律，第一段文章描述了圖表中所反映的我國(guó)吸毒者年齡的分布最近二十年的變化情況;第二段說(shuō)明了產(chǎn)生這種變化的原因;最后一段陳述了吸毒無(wú)論是對(duì)個(gè)人的身體健康還是對(duì)社會(huì)的安全穩(wěn)定都構(gòu)成了巨大的威脅，并作出呼吁。文中亮點(diǎn)詞匯有to be concrete，rose up to，call for more of our concern，have an overall understanding of，commit robbery，poses a great threat to，put an end to等等，為文章添彩。

　　模擬訓(xùn)練三

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　　Campus Security

　　Security issue may sound cliched, but when it comes to the campus security, we have to take it seriously.Nearly every day, there are reports to the security office on campus that valuable things are stolen away.A surrounding with stealing, mugging can’t be worse for studying.In such cases, what measures should be taken to improve the campus security?

　　Above all, we students should strengthen our security awareness.Once we smell out something unusual, we should report it to the campus guard immediately.In addition, more equipment such as monitors should be installed on campus so as to detect crimes as soon as possible.Besides, a proper amount of security guards should be arranged to patrol the campus.

　　As to me, campus security will be improved as long as efforts are made on campus.Therefore colleges and universities should exert their best efforts to make everyone on campus safe and sound.

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　　文章以描述校園安全出現(xiàn)的問(wèn)題進(jìn)入主題，逐步引申到應(yīng)該及時(shí)采取措施，最后進(jìn)行展望，提出號(hào)召。文章第二段使用On the one hand，On the other hand介紹解決問(wèn)題的方法，使文章意思表達(dá)簡(jiǎn)潔明了。本文使用了一些精彩的語(yǔ)言及句式，例如：In such cases, what measures should be taken to…, strengthen our security awareness, exert their best efforts to, safe and sound等，使文章更具文采。