小作文

　　五檔，9分

　　Dear editor,

　　I'm a sincere reader of your newspaper and I like your discussion of the social problems. Now I want to give some opinions of myself about the "White Pollution"

　　As we know, regulation was made to solve the problem in June 1st of 2008. The use of plastic bags was restricted in the supermarket and many other shops freely. At the beginning, it was carried on well, but now I found plastic bags were used in some small shops for free or with no pay.

　　I am writing to tell you that we should solve this problem soon with the help of your newspaper. You could make some investigators about it and write some reports of it, so as to appeal to all the people’s attentions of our society.

　　Sincerely,

　　Li Ming

　　本文很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，與目標(biāo)讀者完全產(chǎn)生了預(yù)期的效果：

　　1.內(nèi)容包含了所有的內(nèi)容要點，該文第一段的內(nèi)容更吻合題目的要求。

　　2.所使用的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯比較豐富。

　　3.語言比較自然流暢，盡管存在個別的語法(例如，時態(tài))和用詞錯誤。

　　4.有效使用了各種銜接手段，層次清晰，組織也比較嚴(yán)密。

　　5.格式與語域恰當(dāng)貼切。

　　四檔，7-8分

　　Dear Editor Wang,

　　I am a senior student living in Beijing. Being a citizen in our capital, I care a lot about our environment. But, although the law of not using plastic bags had been enforced since June, the effect is not very good. I am afraid 'White Pollution" will still exist for a long time.

　　I believe there are ways to improve the situation. Our communities could offer bags free, which will substitute plastic bags. Meanwhile, some education on environment and White pollution should be held to local people. Besides the above two, much more can be done. I hope you would consider it carefully.

　　Yours truly

　　Li Ming

　　較好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，基本能夠?qū)δ繕?biāo)讀者產(chǎn)生預(yù)期的效果：

　　1. 包含了所有的內(nèi)容要點，既簡要介紹了自己的觀點，又提出了具體的建議。

　　2. 所使用的句子結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯相對比較豐富，例如：Being a citizen in……, I care……等。

　　3. 語言基本正確，當(dāng)然也存在著一些語法錯誤和用詞的錯誤，但是并不會嚴(yán)重影響意義的表達。

　　4. 采用了適當(dāng)?shù)你暯邮侄�，例�? but, meanwhile, besides等，層次也比較清晰。

　　5. 格式和語域比較恰當(dāng)。

　　三檔，5-6分

　　To whom it may concern:

　　As a student of a university, I want to take this opportunity to express some points about "White Pollution".

　　There is no denying that plastic is destroy our environment is we use it excessively. So the government take some means to deal with it. Restrict to use the plastic bags in whole country. But it didn't get successful as we predict. The "White Pollution" is still around our environment in some regions.

　　Takes measures is needed. I want to take some recommends. First and formost, more strength restriction is needed by pollution education. Second, media should spread more information concern. Only in this way can we curb the statement. I'm looking forward your reply.

　　Sincerely yours

　　Liming

　　基本完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，對目標(biāo)讀者基本產(chǎn)生了預(yù)期的效果：

　　1. 內(nèi)容包含試題所要求的兩個要點，沒有跑題。

　　2. 具有較多的用詞與語法錯誤，但是讀者仍然能夠大致領(lǐng)會作者想要表達的意思。

　　3. 采用了一些簡單的銜接手段，內(nèi)容還算連貫，層次也算清楚。

　　4. 格式和語域基本合理。

　　二檔，3-4分

　　I am very sorry to trouble with you. But this is a problem annoying with me. It is White Pollution. With the economic growth widely, white pollution become more and more serious. It is harmonious between the men and nature. White pollution destroy some special. More and more similar issue can be read today in newspaper as well as in magazine.

　　The problem can be solved in some ways. First, attitude is everything. We must make people aware of this issue. Second, we must change with ourself. It's essential that we address our problem before looking to others change. Finally, the acts of pollution must be punishment.

　　I'm looking forward to your reply!

　　Yours sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　未能按照要求完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，不能清楚地將信息傳達給讀者。

　　1.第一段落的內(nèi)容離題太遠，未能很好地表達題目的第一個內(nèi)容要點。

　　2.語法和用詞錯誤太多，表明作者缺乏基本的英語語法知識或者使用語法知識的能力。

　　3.雖然也使用了一些銜接手段，但是內(nèi)容上缺乏連貫性。

　　4.格式和語域不恰當(dāng)。例如，此信沒有抬頭。

　　一檔，1-2分

　　Dear the editor

　　I'm pleasure to write the letter to you. With the development of the socity, white pollution is more and more bad. Our sky is not blue, our earth is not clean and our river is not fish.

　　To solve this question, I have some suggestions. First, every one drive their car less a day in a week than before. Second, when we are shopping, we use environment plastic bags. Third, our government do some rules. Do you thing my opinion? Look forward your reply.

　　Yours faithfully,

　　Li Ming

　　未完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，不能把信息傳遞給讀者：

　　1.文章內(nèi)容基本離題，有許多不相關(guān)的內(nèi)容。

　　2.作者基本不具備英語的語法常識，句子結(jié)構(gòu)簡單且不完整。

　　3.用詞錯誤太多，詞不達意。

　　零檔 0 分

　　dear editor:

　　I am a student of Tianjing University. Recently years our country

　　所傳達的信息或者所用的語言太少，內(nèi)容與要求也無關(guān)系，無法評價