恩波狂背作文連載五：圖畫作文寫作實戰(zhàn)

　　What an attractive scene it is! On such a peaceful and beautiful morning by West Lake, a middle�瞐ged foreigner is jogging—he is enjoying the fresh air, cool breeze and charming scenery. From this picture, we can see clearly that the foreigner enjoys life in this Chinese city, Hangzhou.

　　As a matter of fact, in the past few years, more and more foreigners have chosen to live in China. Some work here, some pursue their study in universities and even some join volunteer activities in China. The reasons why more and more foreigners like to live in China can be listed as follows. To begin with, since China’s reform and opening�瞮p in 1978, our country has witnessed great progress in nearly all aspects of the society, especially in economy, which provides a far better environment of working, investing and studying for foreigners. Second, economic globalization has made cultural blending possible and necessary. Foreigners have come to know more and more about Chinese culture and become influenced by it, which has formed the important basis of their living in China. Last but not the least, it is obvious that with every effort we have made in environmental protection, our country has become a place more and more suitable and pleasant to live in.

　　In my opinion, the arrival of foreigners brings more chances and opportunities of economic development. So why not seize such chances to embrace our bright future?

　　點評：

　　第一段描述圖畫。這一段寫得非常精彩，先以感嘆句開頭，而后描述圖畫，最后小結(jié)——這位外國人喜愛在杭州的生活。

　　第二段前兩句總結(jié)了外國人來我國的現(xiàn)象。第三句是原因類的模板句，而后分三點來說：第一點是說改革開放后我國經(jīng)濟發(fā)展迅速，給外國人提供了很好的工作、投資和學(xué)習(xí)環(huán)境；第二點是說經(jīng)濟全球化促進(jìn)文化融合——外國人對中國文化了解更多，這構(gòu)成了他們在中國生活的重要基礎(chǔ)；第三點是說環(huán)境保護效果顯著，居住條件自然改善了。

　　最后一段說外國人的到來帶到了更多的經(jīng)濟發(fā)展的機會，所以為什么不抓住這些機會來擁抱我們美好的明天呢？

　　心得：

　　要寫出好文章，首先要對文章的基本結(jié)構(gòu)非常熟悉，而后再做出一些變化，這些變化通常就是亮點。比如第一段先使用了一個感嘆句，立即吸引了讀者的注意力。第三段第二句使用了反問句，效果非常強烈。

　　Directions 3

　　Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the drawing,

　　2. analyze the reasons why it is difficult for university graduates to find a job, and

　　3. point out the possible ways to solve the problem.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　審題：

　　《招員工七名》 這篇文章關(guān)注的是當(dāng)前重要的就業(yè)難問題。它的要求非常明確，在描述圖畫后，先給出原因，再給出解決辦法，這是非常常見的文章模式。

　　Sample:

　　The recruiting fair in the above drawing is filled with young graduates each holding a pile of resumes in their hands. Around a desk in the front of the drawing, there are dozens of students waiting to hand in their resumes but only seven are wanted by the company as is written on a board beside the desk.

　　It is clear that the drawer wants to draw our attention to the difficulty that today’s university graduates are faced with in finding a job. In fact, in many universities and colleges, the employment rate of graduates is lower than 50% and much fewer can find a satisfactory job. The reasons for this situation can be listed as follows. In the first place, the enrolment expansion of universities and colleges has resulted in a great increase in the number of graduates every year, which has exceeded the increase in positions in the job market. What makes things worse is that quite a lot of students like to choose those hot majors when they enter the university and to look for jobs in big developed cities when they graduate. So it is even more difficult for them to find a suitable job.

　　From my point of view, the society and the graduates need to join their hands in the endeavor to solve this problem. On the one hand, the society should continue to focus on economic development so as to provide bigger employment chances for the graduates. On the other hand, the students should choose the majors that they are really interested in and well capable of and broaden their horizon when looking for jobs. Only in this way can they gain larger space for their future career.

　　點評：

　　該文分為三段，第一段描述圖畫，第二段對此問題進(jìn)行了小結(jié)，而后給出了原因。第三段提出了解決問題的辦法。

　　第一段共用兩句話，第一句是遠(yuǎn)景，第二句由遠(yuǎn)及近，展示了求職者之多與實際招聘人數(shù)之少。第二段共分六句話，前兩句總結(jié)了大學(xué)畢業(yè)生就業(yè)難這一情況，第三句話是原因類的模板句。第四句話說擴招帶來的影響。第五句話和第六句話說大學(xué)生選擇熱門的專業(yè)，使就業(yè)難的矛盾更加突出。第三段共分四句話，第一句話是總括句，說社會和畢業(yè)生應(yīng)攜起手來解決問題，而后分兩句話分別說明。最后一句話是總結(jié)，使用了語氣強烈的倒裝句。

　　心得：

　　這是常考的模式，望大家用心學(xué)習(xí)。

　　Directions 4

　　Study the following table carefully and write an essay in which you should:

　　1. describe the table,

　　2. suggest possible solutions to the problem of the heavy burden of university tuition in China.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　國家大學(xué)年平均學(xué)費國民人均年收入比值

　　美國4，700美元35，000美元1/8

　　英國1，500英鎊15，000英鎊1/10

　　中國7，500元7，500元1

　　審題：

　　在審題的環(huán)節(jié)中，我們應(yīng)當(dāng)將讀圖表(圖畫)和看提綱有機地結(jié)合起來。有的時候，提綱中會把文章的主題直接給出來，這時我們文章的整體布局就會容易得多。在這道題的提綱中，就出現(xiàn)了“中國大學(xué)學(xué)費負(fù)擔(dān)沉重的問題”的字樣，這就是該文的主題，我們的文章應(yīng)該圍繞它展開。

　　Sample:

　　From the above table we can see that in America and Britain the ratio of average annual tuition of universities to gross national income per capita is about 1 to 10, but astonishingly that in China is 1. That is to say, the burden of university tuition on Chinese families is nearly ten times heavier than that on American or British families. As a matter of fact, most Chinese families feel it difficult to afford the high tuition of their children, and some absolutely cannot afford it, which has received more and more concern from all over the country.

　　In order to solve this problem, I strongly suggest the following solutions. First and foremost, it is a must to reduce the cost of higher education. We need to cut down the staff in universities, most of whom now have a disproportionately large number of administrators. The now widespread corruption should also be eliminated in universities, such as unnecessary tours and banquets at public expense. Moreover, much importance should be attached to the reform of management system of higher education. The national government should not only increase financial investment in higher education but also optimize the distribution of such money.

　　To sum up, it is high time to pay enough attention to the problem of the heavy burden of university tuition in our country, and to solve it a comprehensive educational reform is essential.

　　點評：

　　該文共分三段，第一段是描述表格，第二段是給出解決辦法，第三段是總結(jié)。