Directions 12
Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. make your comment on this phenomenon.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
審題：
這篇文章配的圖很簡單，而意義卻是深刻的。提綱的第二部分和第三部分分別是闡釋含義和做出評(píng)論，我們可以分成三塊來寫：提出問題——從兩方面分析——下結(jié)論。這樣文章包含開始描述圖畫的部分就有了四個(gè)部分。
筆記本電腦可以寫作laptop computer, portable computer, notebook computer, notebook PC，在文中應(yīng)替換使用。
Sample:
In the above picture a university student is phoning his mother, “In order to make progress in my study, I want to buy a laptop computer.”
Is a laptop computer indispensable? Does a laptop computer mean greater possibility of academic excellence? Does a student without a laptop computer have no chance of success? It is obvious that the drawer wants all of us to think deeply before providing the answer. To reach a reasonable conclusion, we should analyze this problem from two perspectives.
On the one hand, we cannot guarantee that the student will use the portable computer solely for studyrelated purposes. Most of them have not lived independently, so they do not know how hard it is to make a living. Once they have the computer at hand, those students who lack selfcontrol may be indulged in computer games or online chatting, which will waste their time and affect their health.
On the other hand, a student without a notebook computer can also be a top student. Sometimes students do need computers to finish assignments, and the computer rooms on campus can often meet that purpose. For those students whose majors call for frequent use of computers, they also can buy the desktop one, which is much cheaper.
After careful consideration, we should say that the luxurious learning equipment such as a laptop computer is not necessary unless the parents can easily afford it and the student uses it only to facilitate his work and study.
點(diǎn)評(píng)：
大家可能會(huì)問：出題人是讓我們就題論題寫筆記本電腦呢，還是推衍開去泛泛而論這樣的奢侈類學(xué)習(xí)用品呢？在這里我們寫成兩種情形都是可以的，范文中是先就筆記本電腦展開提問和思索，最后做結(jié)時(shí)用了“諸如筆記本電腦的奢侈型學(xué)習(xí)用品”的字眼。
文章共分五段。第一段描述圖畫，非常簡潔。第二段連問了三個(gè)問題：筆記本電腦必不可少嗎？它一定會(huì)推動(dòng)學(xué)業(yè)進(jìn)步嗎？沒有就學(xué)不好嗎？第一個(gè)問題是核心，包含了后面兩個(gè)問題。之后的兩句話是過渡句，起承上啟下的作用。第三段和第四段分別回答上面的后兩個(gè)問題，均得到了否定的答案。而最后一段下結(jié)論直接呼應(yīng)了第一個(gè)問題——說明筆記本電腦不是必需的，只有同時(shí)符合兩個(gè)條件時(shí)，筆記本電腦才是有益的。
心得：
第二段的連續(xù)提問很有震撼力——為了能在考試中運(yùn)用出豐富多彩的語言表達(dá)方式，平時(shí)多積累、多練習(xí)是很關(guān)鍵的。
第三段是寫有了手提電腦后不一定會(huì)學(xué)習(xí)。下面分兩句來寫，先寫原因，后寫結(jié)果。由于不知道賺錢的艱辛，所以缺乏自制力的學(xué)生很可能沉迷于電腦游戲或網(wǎng)絡(luò)聊天。
第四段寫沒有手提電腦也可以成為優(yōu)等生。的確需要電腦時(shí)，可以去機(jī)房。個(gè)別確實(shí)需要常用電腦的學(xué)生，可以購買便宜得多的臺(tái)式機(jī)。
最后一段非常精彩，說只有兩個(gè)條件齊備，象手提電腦這樣的學(xué)習(xí)用品才能發(fā)揮作用。這兩個(gè)條件就是家庭承受得起和學(xué)生將之用于學(xué)習(xí)與工作的目的。
文章中有許多優(yōu)秀的詞組與句型，下面以第三段為例，希望大家用心識(shí)記。該段第一句中的guarantee表示“保證”，use...solely for studyrelated purposes表示“只用于學(xué)習(xí)相關(guān)的目的”，是個(gè)很地道的表達(dá)方式。第二句比較難以表達(dá)，如果這樣寫就不嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)：They have not earned money, so they do not know how hard it is to make a living.建議改作范文中的寫法，或者：Most of them have not lived on their own, so they do not know how hard it is to earn money.
寫作中的推敲琢磨很重要，我們一邊學(xué)習(xí)、模仿別人的文章，磨礪、比較自己的寫法，這樣就一定能獲得進(jìn)步。第三句使用了once引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句，使得時(shí)間接續(xù)非常緊密，而后使用at hand表示“得到”，非常精妙，遠(yuǎn)勝于普通的寫法：Once they have bought the computer, ...句中使用定語從句who lack selfcontrol是嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)?shù)膶懛�，因�(yàn)椴⒉皇撬械膶W(xué)生都會(huì)沉湎于壞習(xí)慣中。后面的be indulged in表示“沉湎于”，句子最后使用了非限制性定語從句，分兩個(gè)方面說明危害。
