第 1 頁:圖畫描述段 |
第 2 頁:闡述段 |
第 5 頁:建議措施段/評論看法段、舉例論證段 |
第 6 頁:小作文部分 |
二、闡述段
天龍八部 三分天下
食品安全問題
到底什么是天龍八部? 簡單理解,就是八個可以在第二段當(dāng)中構(gòu)思的方面。第二段最好是總分總的夾心式寫法。其中最最最關(guān)鍵的是現(xiàn)狀分析,原因分析和后果分析。注意到,這八個方面是可以構(gòu)思的方面,不是要都寫,都寫的話,這一段一般人過200,高手過1000. P2注意盡量控制在6-7句以內(nèi).
1.由淺入深:Simple as the picture is, the connotation behind it should be taken into consideration with more insight and penetration.
2.深層含義:Undoubtedly, the purpose of the picture is to convince us that due attention has to be paid to the prevalent and pervasive issue of unsafe food.
3.現(xiàn)狀(羅列除了很多可以參考的寫法)
1)The past several years has witnessed/experienced the phenomenon that people in growing/increasing/expanding/mounting numbers suffered from the severe consequence of unsafe food.
2)The unprecedented economic development over the past several years is accompanied by the dramatic increase of unsafe food.
3)We can think of a variety of cheating phenomena in our contemporary society, such as the poisonous milk which results in prevalent infant kidney problem, and eggs which contain undesirable chemical factors, all of which are sounding an alarm to our society.
4.原因(寫一條就可以,不寫也沒問題,但是要讓文章顯得有深度最好分析一下原因)
1). 人們?yōu)榱俗非罄麧,而喪失了道德底線
2). 國家監(jiān)管不力,相關(guān)法律并未完善,給了不法分子漏洞
3). 萬能BT理由,社會壓力巨大。(with the quickening pace of life, competition goes increasingly fierce in all walks of life, imposing tremendous pressure on all individuals.)
1)Several factors, both individual and social, could account for the negative phenomenon.
2)The reason for the phenomenon may be complicated, but we can, to a large extent, ascribe it to the following interrelated factors. (1,2兩句作用相同,都是引出兩條原因。注意沒必要兩條,一條就夠,兩條主要是為了層次感)
3)具體的兩條理由,On the one hand, a great number of people are only in pursuit of the maximum profit, totally turning a blind eye to /totally ignoring the basic morality of the whole business.
On the other hand, our legal system is far from perfect, which directly or indirectly provides the immoral businessmen with the chance of cheating.
(*)現(xiàn)狀+原因(單原因)(其中還有象征點的寫法出現(xiàn))
The irresponsible teacher depicted in the picture is naturally associated with a great number of professors in real life, who are only in pursuit of their research papers and titles, while totally turning a blind eye to their obligation as qualified educators, for the reason that a great number of colleges and universities regard the number of papers as an essential standard to judge a teacher.
5.后果/影響
Professional dishonesty not only adversely affects the health condition of numerous consumers, but also poses a probable and potential threat on social stability.
壞:1.Adversely affect
2.pose a probable and potential threat on
3.exert a(n) unfavorable/undesirable/adverse/negative consequence on
4.sound an alarm to
5. put an enormous pressure upon
好:1.Lay a solid foundation for
2.exert a(n) positive/favorable/far-reaching/beneficial impact on
3.play a(n) vital/crucial/irreplaceable role in
4.serve as a catalyst for
教授的職責(zé):The indifferent attitude towards education not only undermines the teaching quality of universities and adversely affects students’ desire for knowledge, but also sounds an alarm to education system in contemporary society.
Undeniably, this phenomenon will reduce the education quality. And students on the other hand, will have no specific and professional instruction.
6.舉例說明 It can be best exemplified by the case of poisonous milk and other dangerous food.(其實就是聯(lián)系實際,也可以說就是現(xiàn)狀的具體體現(xiàn))
參考:2006:小貝頭
Undoubtedly, the photos have subtly reflected the social phenomenon that idol worship is prevalent among the youth nowadays. Beckham represents the image of sport hero whose handsome appearance and unparalleled football skills are passionately adored by all the sports fans. Likewise, several teenage girls won their fame overnight in The 2005 Super Girl Contest in China, which provoked nationwide noisy debates on the value and harm of admiring these idols. Generally speaking, young people are inclined to adore the people who excel in appearance, intelligence or talent.
7.層進的修辭手法和轉(zhuǎn)折的運用
It is undeniable that we must be honest, which should be accepted, respected, appreciated and shared (advocated) by all the businessmen. Regrettably/However, it is ruthlessly and relentlessly ignored in contemporary society.
8.威脅性總結(jié)
If we let the situation go as it is, the whole market even the entire society would deteriorate and collapse/ the whole market even the entire society would become unimaginable and uncontrollable/ the whole market even the entire society would become uncurbed.
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