Directions 7
Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the two pictures,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. point out the consequences for this phenomenon.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
審題:
提綱包含了三個部分,這篇文章可以分為四段來寫,其中末段是結(jié)語。真實寫作中前三段可以與提綱有明顯的對應關系,這樣的安排思路清晰,易于把握。
Sample:
In the pictures, we see clearly a person who claims to begin his grand scheme tomorrow. In the first picture, he claims that he will begin tomorrow because he is not yet well prepared today. In the second picture, when tomorrow really comes, he again says he will begin later because he is not feeling well at the moment.
What can we say at seeing such pictures? We can always find excuses for our mistakes, failures and inaction, but how can we make real progress in our life? We will never ever grow up if we keep on finding excuses instead of looking directly into the matter, analyzing the situation objectively and taking action as soon as possible.
Delay has a lot of bad consequences. In many cases, we will lose the chance to succeed forever. Time is limited, and so are youth and enthusiasm. When we form a plan, we should always try our best to put it into practice immediately. We should not worry about failure, because we can always learn from it. Only if we keep on trying and never stop, will we make progress and eventually turn our dream into reality.
The important thing in life is to have a great aim and the determination to attain it. Without action, a great aim will be nothing more than a castle in the air.
點評:
第一段分別描述了兩幅圖畫,獨特之處在于首先將兩副圖畫的共同之處提取出來——描寫一個人說明天就要開始宏偉的計劃,而后分別描述兩副圖畫的不同之處——這樣做的好處是使段落的條理清晰。
第二段的首句使用了設問句,一下子引起了讀者的興趣,而后自己給出答案——我們總是能為錯誤、失敗和無行動找到理由,可是我們又怎能取得進步呢?這個句子中使用了平行的名詞和反問句,效果強烈,非常引人注目。該段第三句進一步說明,使用instead of強化了對比關系——如果一直尋找借口而不是直接查清事實、客觀分析情況和盡快采取行動的話,我們永遠也無法成長。注意句中否定意義的表達:
We will not grow up if...
We will never grow up if...
We will never ever grow up if...
在上述三種表達方式中,我們可以看出,最后一種不僅語氣強烈,而且極富韻律。
第三段先說了拖延的壞處,而后說了我們正確的做法。
最后一段做結(jié),共兩句話。第一句是引用了歌德的名言,而第二句是反過來說——如果沒有行動,偉大的目標就只能是空中樓閣。
心得:
要想寫好文章,就要先寫好句子,再寫好段落。文章大的結(jié)構(gòu)的確定是不難的,關鍵是寫好單個的句子后再將它們有機地組成完美流暢的段落。
第三段就是一個好的例子,這一段分成兩個部分,各有三句話,有機地結(jié)合在了一起。第一句先是講拖延有很多壞處,第二句直接解釋第一句——在很多情況下,我們就永遠失去了成功的機會。注意這句話的寫法,首先,使用in many cases表示“在很多情況下”,顯得客觀,因為不是所有的情形均是如此。其次,使用forever表示“永遠”,加強了語氣,并且恰如其分地指出了人生的悲愴,點出了韶華易逝的真諦。第三句是對第二句的補充說明——時間是有限的,青春和激情也是如此(句子的后部使用了倒裝)。第四句筆鋒一轉(zhuǎn),說明我們一旦有了計劃,應當全力以赴立即將其付諸實踐,注意這里使用了immediately,是反過來與該段的第一句話進行呼應。第五句說明我們不該擔心失敗,因為我們總能從中學到東西。末句是以only開頭的倒裝句,說明行動和結(jié)果之間的關系,語氣很強。