Direction 30
Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should
1) describe the drawing，
2) give possible reasons for the phenomenon, and
3) suggest possible solutions for the problem.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
審題：
該文提綱可分為三個(gè)部分：描述圖畫；給出圖畫所表現(xiàn)的現(xiàn)象的原因；給出解決問題的辦法。這是一種非常常見的文章模式。在提綱中直接給出主題的情況不多，如果沒有給出，就應(yīng)該在第一段或第二段開頭明確地點(diǎn)出來。圖畫題一般有兩種情況，一種是平鋪直敘，直接寫圖畫反映的問題或現(xiàn)象；一種是含義深刻，簡潔的圖畫中蘊(yùn)涵著深刻的道理。一般來說，后者的難度較高。這里屬于前一種情況。
Sample:
In the picture, we can see clearly that two small children are showing off their father’s business cards. One says proudly, “My father is the manager of his department.” And the other immediately laughs at him and utters, “Oh, that’s nothing. My father is the CEO of a multinational corporation.”
The reasons why such a worrying phenomenon arises, in my belief, are as follows. First, in the social transformation period, some people pay more and more attention to wealth and status, and link success to such superficial factors, thus making a destructive compact on children. Second, today’s media, to some extent, have actually aggravated such an unfavorable situation. In films and TV series a happy and ideal life is often depicted as a luxurious one, which will inevitably have an adverse effect on young people who are still not mature enough to distinguish between right and wrong. Third, teachers, on many occasions, have not done a satisfactory job. The present education system sometimes attaches too much attention to the scores and grades of students and overlooks their personality development.
To change the present unfavorable situation all of us must make immediate and substantial efforts. The government should try it best to create a social atmosphere in which people cherish diligence, conscience and simplicity. Teachers and schools should make every effort to teach the students to grow up into responsible and enterprising citizens who are determined to contribute to the development of the community, the nation and the whole world. Parents should let students get in touch with the society, helping them know that a meaningful life is one that brings significance to others. Only in this way can we hope to solve such a disturbing problem and ensure the brilliant future of our nation.
點(diǎn)評：
該文共分三段。第一段描述圖畫。一般說來，先描述圖畫，后點(diǎn)明主題的情形比較多——這樣寫重在歸納，比較重視邏輯和事物發(fā)展的內(nèi)部聯(lián)系。而本文首句即點(diǎn)明主題，即本文所述的現(xiàn)象——孩子吹噓父親職位、相互攀比的現(xiàn)象——這樣寫開門見山，非常有力度。
第二段寫了該現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的原因。第一句話是段落的主題句，而后分社會(huì)、媒體和老師三個(gè)方面來說。
第三段寫解決問題的辦法，第一句話是主題句，之后分別寫政府、老師和家長正確的做法。這里沒有使用象first,second,third這樣的連接詞，但由于采用了平行的主語，仍達(dá)到了結(jié)構(gòu)清晰的效果。最后一句話是結(jié)論句，使用了強(qiáng)勢的倒裝句，句中使用了連詞and，前面寫“解決問題”，正好與提綱相扣，后面寫“保證國家的美好明天”，是升華的部分，請大家用心體會(huì)末句的寫法。
心得：
第二段與第三段均分三點(diǎn)來寫，其中兩點(diǎn)嚴(yán)格呼應(yīng)，另一點(diǎn)并未嚴(yán)格呼應(yīng)（家長）。這是平行之間見變化的高級寫法，即兩點(diǎn)是顯性呼應(yīng)，一點(diǎn)是隱性呼應(yīng)。
